Like Mexicans
by Gary Soto
The beginning of the story seemed to me like the author didn't
quite know how to jump into the explanation of events.  I felt as though
the author did not put enough detail into the characters and most of
them didn't even seem like they had a part in the story.  I realize that
there must always be a main character in every story, but I feel like
there could have been more than one character followed throughout this
particular story.
As in the first section, I thought that the middle of the book
seemed rather boring and quite frankly, uninteresting.  The author spoke
of sexual encounters the cousins thought that they had experienced, yet
it passed in an instant, as did everyone other experience in the story. 
It almost seems as though the author could not decide whether to linger
on one fragment of an idea or rush through a hundred of them.
Though the author rushed through the story, the way this piece has
been written, it made it seem as though the characters either could not
remember multiple events in their lives or that they did not care to
remember them.  In any case, it came off as being that the characters
rushed through their own lives instead of the author poorly writing the
story.
Near the end of the book, I feel that things got a little better. 
It seemed as though the author allowed his characters to dwell a little
in their lives.  However, in same respect, I thought that the end of the
book could have been better.  I say this because the scene where went
with his girlfriend to her parents house seemed a little odd.  The part
about the hungry kittens clinging to the screen didn't make much sense
to me.  Then, it just left off right there.
Overall, I thought that the story came off as being dull, boring,
and hard to get into.  It almost seemed like he wrote the story more for
himself than for an audience.  Because of it being written in that
fashion, I found it extremely difficult to get into the story and that
caused a lack of interest on my part.  If I wrote the story, I would
think more about what the reader wants to hear.